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Hm, one thing about the transition between this page and the last, with the larger group dispersing: I feel like it felt a little too 'close up' in it's showing. But remember this is just my personal opinion and others may feel the exact opposite. After roughly twenty pages (give or take) of close-up personal encounter, you've more than proven you can draw your unique and rather beautiful species like the pro you are (not to mention the gorgeous winter backdrop).
But the flow of action has all been in their faces, shoulders, full-body in a close-up sort of way for so long as a reader I'm looking forward to more far-out shots, like the bottom panel showcasing the way out for them in this page.
Looking at the bottom panels of this page alone, you have three panels dedicated alone to just Yves' facial expressions for each dialogue bubble. While your mastery of facial expressions is a major strength, overusing facial expressions can become a negative thing.
Don't be afraid to let the dialogue speak for itself; even if this is a graphic novel, words have a power of their own, and your word bubbles are wonderfully expressive without the need to draw panel-by-panel how Yves looks all the time. Panels 5 and 7 could have been removed entirely, giving panel 6 the chance to expand into a full, big panel showing even more of the area they're going. A good panel to have IF the next page transitions into the two traveling, or having a skip between this conversation to down the road, or another area.
^All the above is the opinion and advice from a graphic novel reader, not a graphic novelist. Feel free to disagree.
Anyway when we end up in a stationary phase again in the story I will definitely take your comment into account- I see your point and I agree with it more or less. Only the last pages I wanted to focus on subtle changes in expressions to kinda activate people's 'theory of mind' and empathy optimally - but indeed maybe too much XD
Well I really have no critique and looking forward what happends next! Just one question, will you do a character sheet for Yves as well? I really wish to draw him once
But yeah the cheeds just 'live' in my head so I kinda see them moving and I just draw what I see XD. Next week I will submit the chractersheets of them