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Now, I feel there is a bit of unnecessary dialogue though in the first panel. Nothing big, just a few little things you can do away with simply because it can be assumed from what's already been said. "I think it's safest" and the "I trust you" bits I feel are shown and/or already established in my own head as I read, making those bits of speech seem unnecessary.
And perhaps the "Let's Go!" bit can be moved into the second panel, and made a bit smaller than normal, to show her moving away while also adding additional emphasis to the one moment Yves looks back before moving on and pushing his life in a new direction.